It's A Lonely World
She left the room without looking back. They had nothing to say to each other. Not anymore.
Words were vain efforts now.
Leaning against the door she tried to smile.
Funny world! It is a lonely place without the person that puts a smile on your face.
Starting today, her world was a lonely one.
Just another 55FictionSaturdays
88 added colors:
me first??
you are :P
:( i dnt like sad stories :( :( :( :(
wish ter would be some one who could bring her out of that lonely world!!!
eyyyy!! :)
life is just like that na? we smile.. we cry.. but we always smile again, dont we?
and lol @ eyyyy!!
yes we do.. but only to cry later :(
sometimes we dont :)
:)....nice one..!!
but no smiles...not good yaar...!!!!
Smiles bring to us the beauty of life..!!!
i wish there is someone who could make her smile..!!!
i wish its like that always :)all smiles :)
nice work..
seems like everyone like sad stories..
hmm..i knw.
lena,tell me, why should there always be this one person that makes us happy? thats not the way it should be..how can anyone be alone when the have people around them to love them? friends, parents,teachers,children....only a part of your life gets lonely...right?
a void will be formed..thats all..and sometimes it get filled again...always be with people who loves you, and cares for you..saying that you are lonely when you have such people around is equal to rejecting their love...
btw..u said a lot of things with that lil narrative.
In the first place, I was very sad about a separation. Now you have brought tears in my eyes
...but who is "she"? Hope whoever she is, she is happy soon!!
nice dear...
she will miss him for sure.But as everything she will move on too.
u r a master at 55 word fiction!!
Awww... :(
i wana try out this 55 word fiction. any other rules besides being in word limit of 55??
God is lonely ?
painted with a black color....wish we see more colors from you dear...make me smile :D...
That's sad,but then that's life :(
Good one dear!Nice to see F3S back again :)
:)
Lena,
I will ask her to find company. I guess, she can.
Besides, did not someone say only God is entitled to solitude.
Nice one this 55 fiction thing of yours. You seem bent on attaining perfection. :P
*cheers*
:( :( :(
waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa :"(
How true..the injury due to a slip while walking can be repaired, but the injury due to a slip while talking is irrepairable..In my life too..something like this happened on Thursday night..driving all the way for 4 hrs..she came to just say that she belongs to me..and in 15 minutes of misunderstanding..she was at the door saying goodbye..at midnight..I dont know what I said and what she understood..there was short circuit..my cry to stop..and not to get-out impulsively..fell to silence..the night was long and painful..not knowing how can it happen..wondering..what a shit and misfit I am ..in this..even when I believe and try to live...if I cannot give joy to others..atleast i wont hurt others. (sometimes action/words hurt..sometime inaction hurts..and shows off as not caring..and being aloof..means you have gone far from her..)...and in this case..its my own..that i hurt ..she drove back the longest 4hrs..probably never to look back..at me..I love her..very much..
LOvely indeed!
wow...
55 words and that too making a perfect sense....it is so awesome...
and lonely world is bad..sometime it is such a suicidal :-|
lady! u gotta stop publicizing my life on ur blog! :P
its feels good to be alone at times
:(
maybe there would be a sequel after a few days that would tell us that she is not alone.
take care mate... cheers..
@ yamini:
i believe someone will make her smile, dont worry, life goes in circles :)
@ anil:
life is not like that, right? but we can try and smile even when things go wrong :)
@ amalbose:
thanks :)
welcome here.. and dont know, guess people can more relate to sad stories because they bring their own bitter memories
@ damsel:
you know you raised fair points here.. i mean the world didnt stop, we still live and there are still people who love us.
But at the first moment when someone who was an important part of your life, leaves us, we do feel lonely because we dont understand how we can live now. Sure it is kind of unfair to those who love us and supports us, but they do understand, dont they?
They care anyways and soon we all move on :)
@ Suresh:
maybe next time i will make you smile :)
@ darshan:
she is not me :)
but guess she could be any of the persons we know.. and yes, guess she will be happy :)
@ rainboy:
we all do, dont we? :)
@ mayz:
thanks! but am only practicing :)
@ Mehreen:
dont be so awwww :( girl... she will be fine.. women are strong species :P
and you got to try 55 fiction, i would love to read yours!
@ Hobo:
does God not smile? :)
@ Lancelot:
black is a strong color.. sometimes am tired of pink, you know :P
@ Sami:
it sure is :)
thanks dear!
@ vishesh:
:)
@ TTMS:
she will be fine :)
solitude is not the same as loneliness, is it?
and yes, am striving for perfection, but a long way to go :)
@ preeti:
stop crying, chookcha!
@ dodoisland:
first, welcome here :)
second, yes, you are right, sometimes just a word can ruin anything. I guess we should try to be more careful with what we say.. thats tough to control your ego or emotions or understand what might hurt the other person.. and i wish we could always talk it over instead of freaking out and ending the relationship.
take care
@ Meera:
thanks :)
and welcome on my blog!
@ Sourish:
thanks!
yes, loneliness hurts too much at times
@ neha:
agreed, but only when you know that you can willingly end up this loneliness.. its rather solitude then
@ Arv:
maybe there will be a sequel :)
its simple and yet expresses deep emotions. you write beautifully.
Lena you leave me speecless dear :) ..
damn so few words can leave you with a sigh at the end .....
"World is a lonely place without the person who puts a smile on your face" B.E.A.utiful...:)
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww :(
Sad...The world would indeed be such a lonely place for her.Being in a crowd, and yet feeling lonely:(
...oh that is sad Lena! Hey may be next time there will be happy ending to the love story. Anna :)
Very true words Lena....
Yes, the world can be a very lonely place to someone with a bruised heart.
If words can't help anymore then it's time to close that door.
You know, bruises heal. A small scar might be left but it fades with time.....
@ moi:
thank you dear :)
@ Charmed One:
words have a great power if one knows how to use them... i'm still learning :)
@ Apocalypse:
thank you :)
and welcome here!
@ akanksha:
thats the worst feeling ever :(
@ Anna:
will see if i write something happy next time :)
@ Margaret:
I know, some relationships leave deeper scars though, but even they can heal with the course of the time :)
An after-thot..so if there was a loners' club...there will no more be any lonely ppl..rite? Or for that matter isnt Loners' Club an oxymoron?
very rarely people like to read sad stories specially coz they dont like to face the reality..
i loved it and i know how it feels when such a thing happens
i'm a bit late to add my color janu!
but sometimes u can be ur best company too! :)
nice sad love! :)
Loved this.....words have so much power..........
Lonely? Ha! Let her indulge herself! Solitude is bliss! The world is hers! Better staying away from hypocrites. Period.
Reminds me... You and Ani are still waiting for some romance composition from yours truly. And posts like this can't make lil me think. :(
I'll take inspiration from ur TLRs... :)
Peace.
this is called colours of life :)
its unpredictable....the only thing u can do is walk with flow.....and world is urs....
good one friend..
Take Care
Vikas{V}
Well she did TRY to smile leaning against the door. As long as one has not given up on life... its a happy ending for me! Now all she needs is to WORK for it in the right direction, right? :-D
the world indeed is a sad place without the person who brings that smile on your face... but what if you start smiling in the middle of nowhere, just remembering those beautiful moments and then realizing it's these flashes that make your present now... but at least they want you to live... on.
btw... must be a huge challenge - the 55 words limit, I tried thrice and couldn't...
P.S. thank you so much for that inspiring comment that you left on my blog... loved it!
There is so much said; when you say nothing at all, isn't it?
Nice post!
I was just checking my commnt here, cud not find.
Selective amnesia methinks...
well good post ....as usual...
N waiting for more..
Yes, it's a lonely world as long as you are not with yourself. :) First time here. Loved reading it. :) :)
Hi!
Just came across your blog.
You're a lovely writer.
Nice post :)
Keep it up!
good one... didnt i tell u! :)
@ Pavi:
maybe it is but like someone once said "When so many are lonely as seem to be lonely, it would be inexcusably selfish to be lonely alone."
Another after-thought...
@ Rakesh:
i guess even if we dont like reading sad stories, all of us can really relate to the most of them.
Am happy you like this one :)
@ Vinay:
one can never be late to share your opinion :)
yup, sometimes you can be your best company, but only sometimes..
@ Meghna:
thanks dear :)
@ Kartz:
solitude isnt loneliness and vice versa..
am still waiting for something from you :P
@ Vikas:
i would rather suggest to walk against the flow if it is needed, it always depends on the situation :)
take care too :)
@ Aniket:
absolutely, am sure she is on her way to happiness :)
@ aZoed:
memories can be sweet and bitter ones, right? Once the pain disappears you remember good times and smile, but you should not make these memories of the past your present :)
as for 55 fiction... for me it is a challenge all the time, but i know people who think it is easy and do write good 55fiction just like that :)
PS: am glad could contribute to your post with my comment :)
@ A.R.N:
yup, sometimes you dont need words to express your feelings, and sometimes words are just not enough..
thanks :)
@ Indrajit:
thats the first comment i receieved from you :)
selective amnesia is what we all suffer from :P
thanks :)
@ Jagjit:
sometimes you are lonely even with yourself..
welcome here :)
am glad you liked the post!
@ cursed:
thank you and welcome here :)
@ ankur:
you didnt! :|
It just happens! :)...
World lost, hope lost, smiles lost, yet, she clings on...
for a better tomorrow, with that person who costed her smile or without that person ... :)...
Perhaps, she will be happy on her own, when the cost of happiness is a tear on her cheek, why give a chance for that someone to allow that tear?...
Very good though :)...
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